雅思小作文：流程图-工序图

题目： The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

 

流程图-工序图三大基本步骤：

① 微观：看图分析每个步骤所需的材料+工具+动词

② 宏观：构思文章段落结构

③ 微观：保证句与句之间，段落与段落之间连贯

 

三大步骤具体实施：

① 看图分析步骤

图一：cement生产流程

句1）limestone和clay在crasher里被crash成powder

Limestone and clay are crashed by crasher into powder.
句2）powder被deliver to进mixer里，被mix(成mixture)
Powder is delivered to mixer into mixture, where is mixed.

句3）mixture被sent to 进rotating heater里，被rotate被heat成powder

The mixture is sent to the rotating heater, in which it is heated and rotated.

句4）powder被place在conveyor belt上

Powder is placed on the conveyor belt.

句5）powder经过grinder被grind成cement

Powder is ground by the grinder into cement.

句6）cement被pack成bags

Cement is packed in bags.

图二：concrete生产流程

句1）四种materials分别成一定比例

Gravel accounts for 50%, while cement, water and sand represent 15%, 10% and 25% respectively.

句2）materials被place进concrete mixer顺时针旋转，生产出concrete

The materials are placed in the concrete mixer, which rotates clockwise until concrete is produced.

 

② 确定段落结构：

第一段：两图分别show了cement和concrete的生产流程

第二段：描述图一（句1+2+3+4+5+6）
第三段：描述图二（句1+句2）
第四段：总结并对比图一图二（to summarise+in contrast）

 

③ 最后，将每个步骤用适当的语法结构和语篇标记自然连接

第一段：
The two diagrams show how cement and concrete are produced with different materials and facilities.
第二段：
At the first stage, limestone and clay are crashed by crasher into powder.The powder is then delivered to mixer into mixture, where is mixed. The mixture is subsequently sent to the rotating heater, in which it is heated and rotated. In the next step, the rotated powder is placed on the conveyor belt, before being ground by the grinder into cement[合并图一句4和5].This final product [同义替换powder] is packed in bags.
第三段：
In the process of concrete production, gravel accounts for 50%, while cement, water and sand represent 15%, 10% and 25% respectively. These materials are placed in the concrete mixer, which rotates clockwise until concrete is produced.
第四段：
To summarise [总结], cement production consists of 4 stages（此步骤为图一所示主要步骤：碾碎+混合+旋转加热+研磨）, starting from crushing materials into powder and ending at bagging cement. In contrast [对比], concrete production is simple, mixing four materials.

 

本篇补充表达：

cement水泥

concrete混凝土

limestone石灰岩

clay粘土

crusher压碎机

mixer搅拌机

powder粉末

rotate旋转

heat加热

grind-ground（被动）研磨

gravel碎石，沙砾

clockwise adv顺时针

anticlockwise adv逆时针

be delivered to/be sent to被送进，被放入

be placed on被放置在

conveyor belt传送带

bag v.将～装入袋中

account for/represent占比例

respectively分别

subsequently随后